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2017年關(guān)于考研英語寫作之小作文講解
小作文是考研英語寫作中比較容易拿分,甚至拿高分的部分?墒怯捎谛∽魑男枰⒁獾牡胤奖容^多,加上考場(chǎng)上緊張、焦急,很多小伙伴會(huì)在這個(gè)地方出現(xiàn)不該有的失誤,F(xiàn)在,文都英語老師將以一篇學(xué)生寫的小作文為例,現(xiàn)場(chǎng)傳授在小作文部分勇奪高分的“秘籍”。我們先看下下面的范文。
范文:
Dear Li Ming
I am writing this mail is to congratulate on yours admitted to a university and put forward suggestion regarding the preparation for university life. The detailed information is listed as the following.
At the top of the list , the university is one of the most important parts of our life ,you may have a wonderful life in it. Another point I would like to draw your attention is that inthe campus , you may have much free time , you should take good advantage of it. In addition , there are many excellent people in the university ,you should be modest in it .
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. And I am greatly grateful for your time and attention.
Truely yours
Zhang Wei
點(diǎn)評(píng):
本篇作文的作者在每段開頭首行縮進(jìn)4個(gè)字符,這點(diǎn)做的很不錯(cuò),但還是存在一些問題:
、鸥袷藉e(cuò)誤
、貲ear Li Ming這個(gè)稱呼后面應(yīng)該加逗號(hào);
、趛ours后面也要加逗號(hào)。
、普Z法錯(cuò)誤
①第一段第一句話中有兩個(gè)謂語動(dòng)詞am writing和is;on是介詞,后面應(yīng)該接動(dòng)名詞,所以應(yīng)該是admitting,但此處是“被錄取”,應(yīng)該用被動(dòng)。這句話應(yīng)該改為:I am writing this mail to congratulate you on your being admitted into a university;
、趶牡诙慰,提出的建議不止一個(gè),而suggestion可數(shù),所以應(yīng)該用suggestions;
、墼敿(xì)內(nèi)容如下,The detailed information is listed as follows和The detailed information is listed as the following都可以,只不過the following一般做前置定語,前面一個(gè)句子是常用的表達(dá),后面一個(gè)句子用的較少;
④“在我們的生活中大學(xué)是最重要的部分之一”應(yīng)該是in our life. Another point I would like to draw your attention is……I would like to draw your attention做后置定語,但這里要注意:雖然draw attention to是固定搭配,但這個(gè)to加不加都行。第二段的內(nèi)容還行,但是論述不夠充分,應(yīng)適當(dāng)拓展;
、葑詈笠⒁獾氖荰ruly yours的書寫,尤其是“Truly”的書寫;
、莾(yōu)化建議
①表示“第一、第二、第三”的連詞:
To begin with, furthernore,/what is more, Last but not least
In the first place In the second place At last
、谠诘诙卫锩,建議提出一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)之后用一句話闡述。如果字?jǐn)?shù)太多,可以只用2個(gè)觀點(diǎn);如果字?jǐn)?shù)偏少,則可以提出三個(gè)觀點(diǎn),再略作闡述。
、郾硎“重要”的詞:crucial, fundamental, essential
文都英語老師認(rèn)為,這篇文章總的來說沒有大的問題,都是細(xì)節(jié)性的。但是格式方面的問題是最基本的問題,也是最不該出錯(cuò)的,平時(shí)要多注意。須知“細(xì)節(jié)決定成敗”,認(rèn)真才能成功!
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